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Yearning for Home

3/29/2016

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Ready to go home, we looked out across
Web Lake and saw the noisy, clumsy loons
drifting down as the sun sank
behind purpling mountains.
 
Loons, with haunting cries,
spilling over the sleepy lake,
their black and white feathers
fading into the evening twilight.
 
We stood there, still as statues,
feeling the heartbeat of the lake
and all its creatures beating as one,
our hearts beating as one.
 
Ready to go home, we stood at another lake,
drinking up unbridled beauty in long, slow gulps:
Tahoe, with inky blue waters,
surrounded by rugged mountains.
 
Unwilling to turn away, we stood there,
still as statues,
feeling our hearts press against each other’s T-shirts
 as we said our good-byes.  
 
And by the next year, we had drifted apart,
like the waters of two separate lakes with separate views:
our faces beginning to blur and
fade into evening’s twilight.
 
We stood alone on separate shores,
 still as statues,
our hearts broken but still beating…
yearning for home.

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10 Comments
Jennifer Laffin link
3/29/2016 04:04:50 am

This is beautiful, Lynne. I felt like I was right there with you. It made me feel like summer.

Jennifer

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Janice Ewing
3/29/2016 04:25:24 am

You captured so many emotions in this poem, and interwove them so gracefully with the natural beauty around you. This is a stunning poem.

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lynne dorfman link
3/29/2016 09:09:24 am

Thanks so much, Janice. Your response means a lot to me. This poem was written from the depths of my heart.

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Clare link
3/29/2016 04:27:39 am

Lynne - this is so beautiful. I love how you played with home. Your visual descriptions are so perfect. I am working on that. I keep looking at things and trying to describe them poetically but it is hard for me. I tend to go in the heart door and I am working on the visual door. This poem uses both -- I am going to use this to help me bridge my writing.
Thanks
Clare

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lynne dorfman link
3/29/2016 09:13:16 am

Thanks, Clare. I think the two lakes and their surroundings are so beautiful that they are permanently etched in my memory as is the circumstance I was describing. Beautiful and painful at the same time - thus, the visual images and the heartfelt emotion. This poem was difficult for me to write as I relived it all.

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Rose
3/29/2016 10:12:24 am

I always envy the way you can describe things. This poem has many layers of meaning. It is full of emotion.

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Tara link
3/29/2016 12:06:12 pm

I loved the visual details here - they really made the heart details so much more poignant.

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Shelly
3/29/2016 02:55:56 pm

Such a beautiful poem, Lynne! Such a great description with lots of emotion. Amazing!!!

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Diane Dougherty link
3/29/2016 03:43:25 pm

This is a beautiful poem, Lynne. I love the description of the hearts beating and broken. So moving.

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Nachos Products link
5/2/2023 08:06:02 pm

Appreeciate your blog post

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    Lynne loves to write in the early morning hours, especially in warm weather when she can sit outside on the patio.  After a walk with her three Welsh Corgis, her mind is cleared and her spirit is inspired by the choir of birds in nearby bushes and trrees. 

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